Sparta Ad (Updated with Final Version)

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    Sparta Ad (Updated with Final Version)

    hey guys this is the final for my graphic design class and i just wanted some feedback.

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    Re: Sparta Ad

    i dont mean to be a post whore but i would really like you guyses feedback before i submit it
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    Re: Sparta Ad

    The grill looks like some guys junk....

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    Re: Sparta Ad

    as a magazine ad how do you think it works?
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    Re: Sparta Ad

    Not quite - the relationship between the interior of the car being the "jelly" in the donut and the car "performing" donuts becomes lost because the car is not the donut, the car is performing the donut. Re-think ad and correct the context to make your points more cohesive.

    The last sentence should be changed as well. Something like "Just because we give you the perfect tool to make the perfect donut, doesn't mean you'll be impressing cops with them.

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    Re: Sparta Ad

    1. You spelt sporty wrong.
    2. I'm not sure the catch phrase works for a 5.5L 350hp car. First time I read it I get the impression that this car will not go fast, will not attract cops, is boring, etc etc. There just seems to be a disconnect between the vehicle you are trying to sell and the theme of the ad.
    3. I don't know about using "filling'll", you have good gramer throughout then you concatenate that word and loose the legitimacy of your ad.

    Nice quality pic but just my 2 cent on the message

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    OMG i did spell it wrong!!! lol i feel stupid. thanx for the heads up
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    Re: Sparta Ad

    didnt have tiome to make corrections but here is the absolutel final version:

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